雅思寫作備考利弊分析怎么寫?

雅思寫作經(jīng)常會有關(guān)于利弊分析的題，那么雅思寫作利弊分析怎么寫?今天小編要和大家?guī)淼木褪顷P(guān)于利弊分析怎么寫的分享。下面我們就結(jié)合這道作文題，看看我們在寫作中可能會存在的問題，以及如何修改。

Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons?

Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

學(xué)生在利弊分析中寫了這樣一個句子：

However, the adverse effects brought by it outweigh the positive effects of it. When the development continues, cities and countryside will be harmful. More and more people go to the city, increasing the pressures of traffic, education, and employment.

教師修改后如下：

However, the adverse effects brought by it outweigh the positive ones. If this mobility of human resource continues without moderate control, consequences may confront both urban and rural areas. For instance, as an increasing number of people move to the city, pressures, such as severe competition in education and employment in cities and the scarcity of labor force in villages, can be intense.

寫作中要常使用代詞，原句第一句較后的effects of it 被替換成ones，更符合評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)對于CC的要求。

上下文句意要符合邏輯(TR)。學(xué)生認為該現(xiàn)象若持續(xù)下去，會導(dǎo)致城市和鄉(xiāng)村變得“有害”。但學(xué)生是把邏輯弄混了，實際上是這種現(xiàn)象的“有害性”，會對城市和鄉(xiāng)村造成影響。因此改寫時將主語作了替換，將城市和鄉(xiāng)村地區(qū)作為了城鄉(xiāng)人口流動這一動作的受動者來寫。

舉例也要有銜接，就算收尾也不能倉促。上一個句子說到城鄉(xiāng)都會受到負面影響，但舉例卻僅對城市作了說明，論證不夠充分，CC會因此失分。寫作要適當(dāng)學(xué)會“瞻前顧后”。

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